Gimmie five...

[virtualpsycho]

Any critiques? Any good?

[Leah-Admin]

Not sure I get the relevance of a giant hand?

[virtualpsycho]

In a business setting, guy placing an order. Joke focused around gimmie five. Sounds like an okay response to question but guy doesn't realise he means slap my hand.

Guy responding is massive for additional visual shock value.

My communication has sucked over the past few I have done. Time to knock that out of me, then all the bad ideas need to come out to find a good one.


Looking at it now after about 12 hours, I realise it sucks.... hahahaha......


Is it the gag that is bad or presentation/communication? Honestly.

[Leah-Admin]

Ok, now I get it

I think problem with this gag is that the 'high five' isn't an appropriate response for 'how much shall I put you down for..?'

ie..why is doing it?

Thus I didn't get it was play on words (hands?) re 'five'.

Maybe it would work better thus

Panel one ... business man asks ' Each Photo Frame is £1000, how many shall I put you down for?'

panel 2..client unimpressed due to high price so give business man the 'victory V' sign for 'F*** off!

Panel 3..Business man says ...' two then...'

[virtualpsycho]

Gimmie five? Give me five? no? - I will take five?

Your gag is definitely better though....


I think it was too personal to myself, not many people in my life have ever said 'high five' and kept their hand low...